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First 5 Chapters of 'The Things That Stay' by HennaLucas First 5 Chapters of 'The Things That Stay' by HennaLucas

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CrazyDemonGirl Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014
I don't believe I've ever read anything so short that captured my attention so thoroughly. I forgot where I was, and the end of the entry caught me by surprise... truly, you possess incredible talent. Good luck with the project!
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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queenofwhatever Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
 How do you get over writers block or start a short story? Because my dad surprised me by entering me in a writing competition and has already paid the entry fee, and now that he told me I cant write at all. The deadline is fast approaching and i'd hate to waste his money. Thank you and sorry for the inconvenience, your picture and writing is flawless, as usual, which is why i came to you for help :)
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EmmonArts Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Um... *peeks*
This is amazing and all (as it always is pfft), but I couldn't help but notice a little mistake on page 22.


"Sure she did. Simon, that tube quite nearly saved your life. Do you realize that you nearly passed on last night?"
"The key word here is 'almost'," replied Simon, lifting off his mask to scratch his nose.

You said 'nearly' in the sentence and then Simon said 'almost'. I don't know if that was deliberate, I just spotted it and felt I should tell you. That is all.

Keep being awesome :)
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fire-graceling Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist
You have a amazing way with word, and i cant wait for paper stars to be published so that i may add a copy of it to my book collection
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
aw, thank you!
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Maevethebrave Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Dang can't wait to read the rest :D Is the book finished? How many chapters? :D
I really love Simon's character especially, really sweet, really realistic :)
Oh, also, I'll note you with what I think were a few errors, I hope you don't mind :)
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks! And it's definitely not finished: I've only written this much
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Maevethebrave Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh ok! Awesome, good luck and I look forward to reading when you're done :)
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zerudez Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, right when I needed something to read..
This is amazing, I only read the first few pages and I'll read the rest when I come home :D
Keep it up.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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xxheygurlhey Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Wow. This is amazing! I'm 13 years old and an aspiring writer, and I hope to write on this level someday...but anyway, I just freaking love this! (:
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
aw, thank you! Just keep practicing!
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Midnight4200 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student General Artist
it only took you a few chapters to create these supercomplex characters wtf are you even capable of making shitty characters
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
wow, thank you! And I certainly hope not--they're what I spend the most time working on!
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Midnight4200 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student General Artist
well they're amazing ♥
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ShawnCageX5 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Professional Writer
I like it, I look forward to seeing the rest.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks!
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iamkathleenpls Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I got lost in this within the first paragraph.....
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
aw, I'm glad!
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LadyAnnaLovelace Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
Page 50, paragraph 11, "“It’s a restaurant—you’re
allowed to eat hear, you know,”" Hear should be here. Otherwise, impeccable writing. I legitimately lost myself in these few chapters, and eagerly await more.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Oops, thank you for catching that!
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LadyAnnaLovelace Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
No problem, and best of luck with your work! You're a truly fantastic writer :)
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ihasrazorback Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful! Your writing style is fantastic!
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Dapper-Rabbit Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
Hi :) Is there a source to the photo anywhere? it's lovely
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likelytodisaster Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
You. I'm used to go 'round the internet reading the work of young writers such as ourselves, and I think I found some pretty good people that, if one day release a book, I'll definitely buy it. And hell yeah, you're for sure one of them. I really like your literary voice and your stories. Hope you'll be recognized one day ;)
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much!!
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AnglAlejandro Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
BEAUTIFUL
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Gratzi!
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pressurized Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love it !
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Nniicole Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is amazing!
The writing is fantastic! You really have what it takes to be an author and I hope you get published.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
aw, thank you!
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maximgolovko Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
nice photo
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emosugarcube Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
This is fantastic, I'm excited to read more. I do hope you get published soon!
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
aw, thank you!
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Daqiq Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
May I ask: what font is the text in?
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
times, size 11
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