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-A Reason- by HennaLucas -A Reason- by HennaLucas
Shiloh didn’t press further, almost ashamed as he stood beside her, and they surrendered to silence for a while. Then again, it wasn’t proper silence, was it? There was the anticipated murmuring of the waves like an audience between scenes, waiting with piqued curiosity for what comes next. There were the heavy, clumsy clouds like curtains, drawn halfway over the spotlight moon. The actors perched on their lighthouse stage, their breathing drawn and catching as they improvised, as they scrambled for the words that weren’t there, words that had not been written quite yet.
And then, the girl found them:
“What’s it like?”
He glanced over at her, almost surprised at the sudden sound. “Hm?”
“What is it like to die?” she asked slowly.
“I don’t know,” he replied. “You just stop breathing, you can’t think. You start getting cold and everything moves in slow motion. It's like you're drowning, and everyone can see you. They can see you and they're breathing while you're suffocating.”
“I want to die, sometimes,” she said.
This took him short, and his throat tightened. “Why?”
“Do you always need a reason?”
“I don’t know.”
She turned the little silver ring round and round on her finger, her large eyes cradling the moon between them. “Shiloh?”
“Yeah?”
“What would you do if I climbed up on that railing and jumped?”
Almost instinctively, he reached over and grasped her wrist—it was a rougher gesture than he intended, but he felt it was necessary. “Emmy,” he said.
“What would you do? Would you go after me?”
“Yeah.”
“I wouldn’t want you to.”
“Well I would. Now you better stop talking about shit like that. You’re not jumping off anything.”
She didn’t respond, nor did she try to reclaim her hand to the pocket of her jumper. She just let him clutch her wrist, since he seemed to have forgotten he was still holding it in the first place. Of course, it was a useless thing on his part: it would take far more than a tight hold on a wrist to keep alive a girl who would rather be dead. But it seemed enough for now.

—The Moon in the Door
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Karly-Berri142 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your writing and your drawings give me so much feelings D: aaaaaah you write sadness/grief/love so well it makes me want to jump into your story and hug everyone! :clap:
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WolvenBlades Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
drool
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Copril Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is beautiful!
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Living-Magikally Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Gorgeous!!!
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EvelynTaliette Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
That was an absolutely amazing little story. As I've heard quite a bit on the subject of suicide recently, it's nice to find a sad little story about someone whose less decided and more wondering on the subject.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! It's from my own WIP novel.
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EvelynTaliette Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! Sounds interesting, I may take a peek at it sometime
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PurpleSketcher92 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This new character of yours, Shiloh, is a very interesting one. Although he is first described as a bit of a selfish person, he gradually grows up. And this is what I find fascinating in your stories. Your characters grow up and become more complex and that is very interesting :)
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
aw, thank you so much!
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PurpleSketcher92 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome! :)
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Cheburaskah Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh my, how emotional and touching!
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
aw :heart:
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PurpleObsessedNinja Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awww this is so sad D:
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
:(
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PurpleObsessedNinja Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the writing and all, but I guess it's just because I connected it to my culture and it made me feel more sad :(
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Seabit Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing :)
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Seabit Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You`re welcome! :D
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92KICKSTART Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student General Artist
whoa crazy =o
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
Is this up somewhere that I can read it?? I love it :D
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
You can read the first two chapters of this here: [link]
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
thanks!!!
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foreverlove18 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Amazing! I read the whole thing, it really sounds amazing. :)
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Nicolle14 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012
sad and beautiful
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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NnyorNieorKnee Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^^ Awesome.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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NCgirl1212 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is amazing, but puts me to the brink of tears at the same time! I love this so much!!!
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
aw, thank you!
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NerdyAndProud Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student
Reading the part about how death feels like drowning reminded me of nearly choking to death. It was weird, I didn't feel anything or think, I only saw blurred colors and shapes. It feels like a very slow dream. Floaty, kind of.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
:o
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PickNspiT Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow! This is beautiful! The drawing and dialogue are like music and lyrics; they both help you see what the other is saying. Your writing is incredible.
Usually when I see a long ol' description under peoples work, -even if its obvious that its a story- I hardly ever read it. But your writing just draws me in.
This is just the second work of yours that I've seen, but it is totally enough! I am definitely adding you to my watch! I have to see the stories behind every one! XP
Wonderful work! I am inspired.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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xXnerd101Xx Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Why whenever I'm actually happy with something I write, I read something you wrote and feel like crying? I'm not saying that as a bad thing but gosh, I really wish I was so eloquent with my writing as you are.

I love your style of drawing, what do you do exactly? It looks like pencil, watercolor, and some photoshop.

amazing as always :)
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Writer
Don't ever let anybody's writing get you down! Enough practice and you can be fantastic. Inspire, don't despair!
But thank you so much, hun! :heart: And as far as process, I do a sketch, outline in my handy-dandy blue sharpie, watercolor it, scan it and tweak what needs to be tweaked on photoshop :)
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xXnerd101Xx Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:) alright! I'll probably try out your process sometime as I've been wanting to get into watercolor :)
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billytheixi Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
Wow, that was really amazing. The dialogue was especially great. I'm really excited to see more of these two, and this little excerpt has made me love Emmy already.

I love how you did the shading with this one, especially on Emmy's face and their clothing. And I have to say, I love Emmy's shoes, too. :D
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I'm so glad you like her. She's really supposed to be the posterchild for undercover depression- a person who is optimistic and light for everyone except herself.
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billytheixi Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012
You're welcome! That's a really interesting idea to put that into a character.

Alright, and I have to ask, since you would probably know where to find something. Do you have any good reading/site suggestions concerning WWII and the Holocaust? I just recently got a novel idea that would take place in that time, but after raiding the school library I still haven't found anything too helpful for research.
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HennaLucas Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
Mostly what I do is read books set in that time period: "Diary of Anne Frank", "Boy in the Striped Pajamas", "Suite Francaise", "The Book Thief" and "My Brother's Voice", as well as more informative non fiction like "Remembering Survival"
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billytheixi Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
I've read the Diary of Anne Frank and am halfway through the Book Thief (Admittedly I put it down about two months ago as I accidentally came across some spoilers and I knew a certain somebody died, and I was getting too attached. XD) I'll look up those other books you suggested, thank you so much!
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